1st draft of my kids story:)

There was a girl in a far away land a land that nobody has ever heard of. A magical land. Where girls and boys never had any worries. There were no parents. See in this land there was a maker. They called him harron now harron was a great maker. He loved his boys and girls with all his heart. But in this magical land called lolnaboo was a bad man. Now he stole from the maker. He did first live with Harron but he did something extrodanilary bad. When this bad man called kallen was kicked out of the where Harron lived which was called fudtain, he got kicked down to live with the boys and girls in lolnaboo. Now how kallen stole from this great maker was stealing his creations. He would take them and change the way they were made. He made them go against harron. Now Kallen had to stay away from Harron if he didn’t Harron could surly kill him. But Kallen wasn’t alone. See some of these boys and girls went with kallen willingly. They wanted to do bad things, things that mommy and daddys would not be proud of. Now these children heard the story of the great maker and the bad man. They had a choice, no matter if they came from the good daddy and mommy’s or if they came from bad mommy and daddy’s, they had to choose whether to follow Harron or Kallen. Now harron would not force any one to do anything. He let his creations be free that is how he liked it. He didn’t want them to turn into robots and do exactly what he wanted. He wanted them to choose for themselves. Now Kallen he didn’t like that he wanted his boys and girls to do exactly what he wanted. He didn’t care about them he only cared for himself he was full of pride. Now the boys and girls would be made and Harron would give them to mommy and daddys, the mommy and daddys would raise them. Then when they reached the age of understanding they would choose either Harron or Kallen they could never choose both or none. Now this one little girl was very interested in the evil man. She thought he was the best. She wanted to be just like him. He lived in lolnaboo with his people she believed that a man that stayed with his people loved his people more then someone who waited for boys and girls to grow old to be with them. She never wanted anything to do with harron. Now a little boy who was not to easy to understand liked harron. He believed that a man who creates the boys and girls would love them more then someone who just lived with them. He believed since harron created him he understood. Now the little girl, Well she chose Kallen. When the little girl chose kallen she became rich with the most expensive things on lolanboo. But when the little boy chose harron he didn’t get anything physical. See he got something in his heart. He finally knew someone understood him for sure there were no more doubts in his mind. He was so care free he ran and jumped and sometimes he could almost reach the special place where harron lived. When this little girl grew into a young lady kallen named her. He named her shellen 109. Shellen 109 never felt free she was to scared of who might take her treasures. She always thought bad of others. She did some bad things just for Kallen but he was never satisfied and neither was she. Now Shellen 109 was so much different from the little boy. But just like Shellen 109 the little boy wasn’t so little anymore. He was the handsomest lolnaboo there was. But not for his outside appearance but for his heart. He was always there to help others, even if those others had chosen Kallen. Now the handsome boy got a name too heatin. But his name did not have numbers after it because he was the only Heatin in all of lolanboo! Harron never named his creations the same name twice. He knew how different one was from the other he knew exactly how many hairs he had on his lolanboo head! Now harron was watching this boy and this girl grow up. He felt so much joy when he looked at Heatin. But when he looked at his little girl creation he felt sorrow and pain. He knew exactly why she rejected him. He knew so much. He even knew the thoughts before Shellen 109 thought them. He knew when and where the next little boy Heatin would help. Everytime he would lead Heatin right to them. Now Shellen109 grew more and more worried about her treasure and more unsatisfied as she grew older. Heatin grew more and more joyous helpful and his heart was becoming just like Harron’s. One day Harron lead Heatin right to Shellen109. Shellen109 had fallen into a deep hole and wasn’t tall enough to climb back out. If only she had a rope instead of a gold chain that kept breaking. Now heatin was walking when he heard shellen109 scream for help “help help”she said. “I’m stuck and I can’t climb out”. Heatin heard her and ran as fast as he could. He put his rope down the hole and yelled to her “grab my rope and I will pull you up!” shellen109 did not grab it at first. She was scared he was a robber and made this hole for her to fall in. “NO!” she yelled. “I will not! You will not have my treasure its mine all mine!”. Heatin knew she chose Kallen. “I will not steal your treasure. I am of Harron.” He called. Shellen109knew it was better to run into one of harrons then one of kallens girl or boys. “okay” she said in a small voice and grabbed the rope. Heatin pulled her up. Now when Shellen109 saw that heatin didn’t want anything to do with her treasure but she was still cautious to make sure it was locked in her purse. Heatin and Shellen109 talked for a long time. Heatin told Shellen109 all about Harron! For he knew that when he had to leave lolanboo he would live with harron in a great palace! He told her that the reason harron could not be with them on lolanboo was because he is building a great palace for when lolanboo gets to old and gets destroyed. The palace would even satisfy any heart! She wanted that! But then he told her that you only could get in if you trusted Harron to save them, and if you didn’t you would go to the other palace Harron was building. But this palace was not like the first one. This palace would make you unsatisfied it would make you hurt feel the pain of being torn apart from your treasure. He was so excited he could share this with Shellen109 because he knew you could switch you didn’t have to follow kallen your whole life. He told her she could have it if she just gave up her treasure willingly! But shellen109 did not like that idea. She loved her treasure. She could not part from it! She got angry at heatin! “How could Harron love all his creations but make them choose! If he wants me to be free then I will be free with my treasure! He is not a kind creator he is heartless!” Heatin did not know what to do. Shellen109 got up she said her goodbyes to Heatin she did not want to stand in the presents of a man who chose such a heartless creator. Years and years went by from the time when Heatin met Shellen109. Finally the day that heatin said would happen to Lolanboo happened. All of harrons people were so joyous and happy! While Kallen’s people dwindled to nothing as they were ripped from the treasure and put into their palace. It was so hard for heatin to see. He finally understood why it was happening. Even kallen was in pain. He was in the most pain of them all. It made Heatin’s heart break. It made Harrons heart break too. Then Heatin saw her. Shellen109 was also in that pain. She knew she could have had a chance she knew now that she rejected her one and only savior. She felt like nothing without her treasure. She kept wishing she had a second chance. But Heatin did give her her second chance. She was done and now she had to suffer in all her pain. She did it all there was no one left to blame she wasn’t deceived by Kallen she chose him. Why? Why would she chose a palace full of pain to a palace full of joy she couldn’t comprehend. This story must end. I cannot even write about how much pain Shellen109 was in. She will be in pain for the rest of eternity. But Heatin well he will be in joy and praise with his creator. Now he knows. To understand yourself you have to let Harron understand you. Treasures in this world will not last forever. But the Creators love, that will last an enternity.
Psalm 37:4-Delight yourself in the LORD and he will give you the desires of your heart